Saturday, September 5, 2009

dastak




Toone chhuaa to rukti hai saansen,

chali purvaai madmast kahaan se.

Yeh aakaash ki sindoori si chunariyaa,

jismen uthi hai baadal ki gathariyaa,

kampti hai jaise saagar ki gaagariyaa,

dene lagi hai dil ko yeh jhaanse,

...............madmast kahaan se.

Yauvan malay ki surabhi too laayee,

kaisi hai mujhape masti yeh chhayee,

soojhe nahin ab kuchh bhi mujhe to,

nikli siskaari kaisi jubaan se,

...............madmast kahaan se.

Detaa hoon dastak tere yauvan par,

baahen failaaye khadaa hoon chaukhat par,

tere hi haathon men kismat hai meri,

mujhko milaa le, too apni jaan se,

..............madmast kahaan se.

Pranhay nivedan tum naa thukraanaa,

pyaase vyaakul ko tum naa tadpaanaa,

teri hi poojaa tum bin nahi doojaa,

mujhasaa premee phir milegaa kahaan se,

Toone chhuaa to rukti hai saansen.


malay- sandalwood; surabhi- fragrance

Ek aur nazariyaa-

detaa hoon dastak tere yauvan par,

baahen failaaye kahadda hoon chaukhat par,

bal hai peshaani par kyun o priyakar,

pitvaayegi mujhako kyaa too apni maan se.

he he he

peshaani par bal- folds on forehead

16 comments:

  1. superb!!! I looove the "ek aur nazariya"!!
    U shd publish a "kavita Sangrah" now!!

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  2. kya baat hai!!!!!!!!!
    dono hi nazariye ekdum must hai.
    actully praf do kavita sangrah hone chohiye ke
    orignal aur ek aur nazariya kyo sahi hai na?

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  3. Thanx Prafulla! "ek aur nazariyaa" situations are more common,all depends when you use the original one. "kavita sangrah" haha hehe hoohoo, who will publish this rubbish? Reidha!! where are you?? too chhupi hai kahaan mai tadaptaa yahaan.

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  4. Thanx Priya! you are the one who always appreciate whatever I do. Dear sis! Ek hi kum bhaari hoga kya jo doosaraa bhi koi publish karega? Kabhi kabhi ichchhaa hoti hai bachpan ki parodies bhi likh doon; kaisaa rahegaa?

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  5. parodies , it's good idea
    ek idea jo badlde aapki duniya.

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  6. Hhe he he he he he The second nazariya is more betterr..:P:P...I like the second one more because it made me laugh:P..
    Though Both of these peoms are outstanding.
    Looks like God wanted to make you a POET but unfortunately due to these worldly complexities he made you a DOCTOR.

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  7. Dastak bhi de raha hoon to khaali makan par...
    aur muntajir bhi hoon ki abhi aayegi sadaa.

    priyakar ke saath peshani pe bal! lagta hai "jaaneman jaaneman tere do nayan" jaisi urdu hindi ki khichdi paka rahe ho. Waise woh gaana bhi bada pyara tha. Doosara nazariya accha lagaa.

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  8. dastak was nice
    bt
    Ek aur nazariyaa- was awesome mama!

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  9. Thanx Preeti for your delayed comments! Better late than never.
    "mai to ek ankahi dil men dabi kahaani thaa, teri jubaan ne mujhako bhi shaayar banaa diyaa"

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  10. Thanx Pawan! your comments always show me that you read my poems seriously and then comes a comment from a person who understands poetry, literature." main hameshaa khud ko khudaa samajhataa rahaa, phir toone mere haath men aainaa thamaa diyaa"

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  11. yaar pawan ye bataa, kya duniyaa men SHRINGAAR RAS samajhanewaale nahi hain yaa kahane men sharmaate hain. Sabko ek aur nazariyaa hi kyon pasand aataa hai? romance ki jagah comedy ne le li kya??

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  12. Dear Garima, Kise pitwaane kaa vichaar hai? thanx for visiting my blog.

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  13. Where are your next article..? they were suppose to be here...
    Well on behalf of pawan...I will answer...His question...Duniya me shrinagaar ras, virah ras and saare dukhi karne vale ras itne jayda ho gaye hai ki...logo ki zindgi se hasi gayeb ho gayi hai...Jaha pe kisi ko hasne ke liye ya mauka milta hai people laugh at that..Life has become so mechanic that we have also become a machine...A machine which works all the time... every one mind all the time is flooded with shrigaar ras and virah ras ...Ex. college love affairs..and offcourse office sceanarios...
    What that is missing is comedy...Which can bring a momentary happiness for few mintues and make our heart joyful...is whar people are looking for..So we like comedy..Offcourse shringaar ras and virag ras has got thier own importance..But to praise them you need to come out of ur cave....

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  14. Thank you Preeti! I posted new write up yesterday only. It will give, my reader friends an idea about the purpose of writing a new blog. After reading that article please visit
    www.demystifyinghinduism.blogspot.com
    I have started to feel that i am running an Ekta Kapoor style tearjerker, and people had enough of it; therefore hinduism thing,comedy and other issue will also be seen in future. The tearjerker will continue as it is my own child.Kisi ne kahaa hai-
    " Hain sabse madhur woh geet jinhen ham dard ke sur men gaate hain,
    Jab lab pe jhalak jaati hai khushi, aansu bhi chalakte aate hain."

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  15. Chacha Ghalib says" Na thaa kuch to khudaa thaa, Kuch naa hotaa toh khudaa hotaa. Duboya mujh ko hone ne naa hotaa main toh kya hotaa.

    Incidentally, Bharatamuni the creator of Natyashastra states that Haasya Rasa is borne out of Shringara.
    It is also said that Life is a comedy for those who think and a tragedy for those who feel.

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